Wow, that feedback was so helpful! It clearly pointed out things in need of change that I think I subconsciously noted, but couldn't quite put a finger on. But now I see the areas that need a little work. Like Professor Scott said, I don't actually ask my audience for anything. I'm addressing the general public along with a research organization, but I don't really know what to ask them for. I thought I needed approval from the organization, and maybe I do, but is there something I should ask of the other people who read my proposal? I mean, it's essentially just me explaining an idea that I think is interesting and important, but the project doesn't require any fuding. Any ideas, anyone??
But anyway, I know I need to clearly state my hypothesis, and make a stronger transition from my "Background" section to my "Purpose" section. Do you have any suggestions on how to do this, Professor Scott? I can see now that those sections are a little disjointed, but I'm not sure how to smooth it over. Should I put another section in between them? Thank you so much for your input.
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I don't think you need another section there, but you do need to create a problem or an exigency for doing this research. So based on the background info, why does this research need to be done? What types of situations or problems call for this research? What would happen if it was never done? etc.
Does that help any?
Yes thank you. :)
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